yellow bird project

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  1. IAmTryingToBreakYourHeart

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    yellow bird project is a cool charity where indie bands design t-shirts. here's a sig with a random render i found for some practice. it needs a lot of work.

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    okay
    render is too blurred out
    there is no real point of focus
    the font is taking away too much attention
    the depth is GROSS! his left hand is not sharp and his shoulder is?! think about it
    the effect over his hand looks not on the point, rather like painted with paint
    the colors are misfitting...
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    It is not even finished.
     
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    The focus is supposed to be on the bird. I really wanted to have a different focus than normal, I think always having the same parts of the render in focus is a little boring. My problem I see now is that I designed everything around Sazh being the focal point, when the chocobo is the actual point of focus. So all the effects and things should be stemming from the chocobo. I agree about the text, it's ruining the flow where it is now.
     
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    I didnt even get that it was a birdie...
     

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