It's a little too dark for my taste. The effects look really cool... but you can't really see them. I would brighten it a little and see what the outcome is. I wouldn't even put a render in, leave it as an abstract. I think a render would ruin it.
Brighten up V2 and you'll have a freakin' poppin' abstract tag. Great compo! Love it bro. You're on fire.