I would make it a lot less wide, take out the rainbow art in the middle, leave the navigation, and make a header and some content boxes based around that navigation. Good effort on your first try.
Whats with the "your text here"?? Did you not make that or are you selling it? Using 1024 width is umm...
Erm, that's a free navigation that you can get somewhere but I forgot.. Kinda weird, with the background part.
its actually pretty good for a first timer, better than other firsties I've seen, I need to get going on learning to do things like that.
Yeh that navigation is an exact copy of the navigation in one of the free themes that comes with frontpage.
you gotta give him credit tho, he was pretty brave to shove a bunch of shit together and post it as a template....that takes balls