The concept is pretty sweet but I do not like the big text in the background since it is destroying all the depth you might could have had at that place. Whats more is that there is no real light source and the flow is somehow wrong because on the left of the render you go to the upper right corner and on the right side as well,. The render has to be the center.
It's nice i like the render, but the white splatter/grunge border and text make it so there is nothing really special going on.