I can't see anything on your tag actually. It seems to be overloaded with effects. Even all over your render. The only thing that is clear to me is the text. I don't like it one bit.
i will definitely take that into consideration. this was the stock http://f.imagehost.org/view/0263/Killzone1 i think i did a good job making it into a differen't and more chaotic scenario, more like a painting or crazy future mid-war snapshot