Theres alot of dead space on the right in this. I do like the effects save maybe the box by the neck, and the colors work great ^_^ adding any text to it?
I'm trying to find some nice text. And I plan on taking out the clipping mask. I'll post v2 in a little bit. I may add some brushing on the right side.
I was just about to say something about those "inborders" until I saw your second version =D I agree with Daecu on this one. There's just seems some blank negative space. Only suggestion I can really give you is experiment on adding some more effects. Just some effects that make it look completed and more time spent on it Good luck with it! Hope you take some of my advice ^-^