this needs a lot of work...focal point isn't strong enough and them yellow dots are distracting. also it looks like there's light hitting his face but there's no light source... i give this a 4/10 sorry.
if i have to be 100% hounest, i never favoured this style. i used to like your other works more. it looks like some of your work is top quality and some or a bit down :\ dont take it personal though :|