Hey, it's not bad mate. Not bad at all. Definitely an improvement from your currents. The lighting is very good. A step in the right direction. ^_^ That bar kind of ruins the flow for me though. Also, work on your coloring a bit. Those pink and purple C4ds aren't very appealing and make the colors look odd. Nice work mate. Let's see more like this.
coloring can sometimes be tricky. but i like it! my only complaint to speak of is the bar. and it's just the placement. i'd recommend taking a bar of about 2/3 that size and making it of the bottom of the render and putting it around there to where it goes with it. nice stuff though! i like it.
