Not really feeling it, maybe cause of the topaz. I wouldn't recommend using topaz on a 2D character it goes great on real people best I personally think. Then again it depends on how you use the topaz filter and the settings. I think there's just a little too much C4D in the BG. My eyes focus a little more on the silver C4D than the focal. Concept doesn't come together well enough for me so try organizing everything out more.
thanks for the advice, i'll keep it into consideration. btw, i thought of it of "graffiti" style tag, so that's why i didn't try to make the c4ds less noticeable