Never do b/w so idk about this one,not sure if i should keep goin or just scrap it, text is bleh so dont comment on it
Whatever the mark is beside the text takes away from focal. Also, the focal looks like it was just kind of slapped on there, try to make the background match the colors of your render/stock.
Then also make the render black and white and your problem is solved right? Some things aren't as hard as they seem