Yeah, I was going to say the same thing about the color. The tag itself is nice, but the monotone kinda kills it.
Font. A font which seems seriously, and literally beautiful.... maybe something cursive or such. Rest is great, and I'd like to see the stock/render/both.
Thanks for the comments. Kind of hard to change the color on this considering the colors on the render don't go with anything else. The render I used is from the Undead Knights video game, the character is Sylvia. She's on the cover of the game. http://imgkk.com/i/0Azj_-.jpg Without Gradient Map and other effects
i think the second one looks a lot better too. The light source in the top right seems slightly out of place. maybe move it just a little bit to the left. also, the text could use just a little bit of work. other than that, that's a really good lookin gfx!
Second one is much better, Someone already said it but you gotta do something with the font maybe try a new position too
Its bland, and monotone.... try bringing out the eyes and center of the face with colour and lighting tweeks.... try and really make thoes features your focus point and have them popping at the moment i find the text to be drawing my eye away from the render.