It could really need some improvement. The colors are not very well chosen and it looks just a little boring, to be honest. It lacks some energy. Try to add some C4ds for some more colors, for some flow, or even apply some gradients, try something out. The way it is, it is boring, as mentioned above.
completely agree with above statement, it's a nice start, but ti's lacking imo most of the effects and colors seem completely random and idunno what about the background texture is pissing me off, but something is. nice try but nothing close to your last one
