It looks a little bit over contrasted, but a fair sig. Also, work more on integrating the text, as it seems out there.
To much going on, I don't like the contrast either. Render has okay blending. Nice try but I just ain't feelin this one.
Too bright, over contrasted, lacks depth, lacks colour, too much lighting and it's all over the place, and the text needs reworking and relocating. Nice try, mate. Good to see some improvement however.