Not bad, text is a little overwhelming. I find the stroke is a little much.. if that is a stroke, if not, maybe it's just not the right sprite? If it's a stroke it might look a little cooler if you toned down the color and displaced it a bit. Also the lighting is a little 1D, it looks like a big white blog turned on soft light. Other than that though, the flow is nice, and the general composition.
