overall It's decent, but I noticed a few things: - The yellow line extended right and upwards, is obviously smudged a bit. It has a weird bend that shouldn't be there ^^ -Also, try not to put any flashing lines or c4ds etc on the shadow side of your focal. The little curly thing left down looks like it should be emitting light but no sign of it on the render ... Pretty nice though
The colors are decent. The flow seems really screwed up though. So many things going in different directions. I think it'd look a lot better with solid flow.