I don't like either of them. They both make it hard to make out the effects and the detail. Form what I can tell the effects look messy. The border looks bad. I don't like either of them,Could you get a full color one?
I think it's a bit too much right now. Try to blur some things into the backround and clean it up so the focal is clear.
I think it's perfect. Got that Damn It Feels Good To Be a Taylor feel to it, cuz that video was black an white .