I like the focal area and the depth, but something about the flow is a little off. I like the B/W version better.
bw version's better, you should work on your bgs, its all just grey bg and effect c4d renders. try not to resize any sprites and its a bit oversharpened on teh sprite as well. add different colors in your tag andtake out the effect render that does the vish shape from the white spot to the other white spot.