I love your concept [My Opinions] 1) The grainy fuzz ball behind the render makes the piece look less better than I imagine it could. 2) I recently discovered Adobe Illustrator, like actually took the time to learn a little bit so I could doodle on it and actually make it looks nice. So I would reccomend learning illustrator for sure. This Render could look AMAZING with some illustrator magic. Personally, I'm not sure if you used Illustrator or not for this. But a nice little tool in that program is Live Trace. I've Live Traced some of my C4Ds and then placed them throughout some of my more recent creations and in my opinion it makes it look cool. Especially if you live trace in black & white, then change the black & white to a relative gradient. 3) I'd also like to say that Im not a very big fan of the box next to the Designed by. in my Opinion Boxes should be used for "Close ups" like say a more "detail" shot, or a different angled view of that piece / render. KhaoticStorm does an amazing job with this in This One (Link) and This one (Link) [/Opinions] I am not saying I'm an expert by giving you these thoughts. I know I'm not an expert at executing whatever I say. But I Hope this helped you even the slightest bit
Wow this is really good. I love the overall piece. I think it would be better if your softened the grain a little bit, it's somewhat distracting, and enhanced the lighting. Maybe brush white in some areas or add highlights to add emphasis and depth. Besides that you've got a solid piece here.