"To be awake to this world means to sleep, It's worse than sleep in fact, and much more deep! Asleep to God, awake to spectacles-- This represents the worst of obstacles; We're kicked and puched by fantasies all day From fear of loss to hope of higher pay, Our souls thus lose their grace and purity To block the path above for you and me."
I'm liking the last one most. I like the text; maybe blend it a little more, idk. Also, maybe you could add some more lighting.