I don't want to be too harsh.. but I have no idea what I'm looking at, and the text needs major work. Try some basic tutorials, and follow the steps very closely.
Its not a bad idea, just needs worked on a little. For one, I would never change the aspect ratio of a render, stretching it NEVER turns out good. Also, its kinda monotone, sometimes, creating a new layer, filling it with black, and setting it to Overlay can make a world of difference. The text is actually one part I don't need think needs messed with too much, looks decent.
