2 New Tags, Improvin?

this is the first



realized it was too sharp, i wanted to change that in the psd, but somehow i couldn't open it in photoshop anymore, so well here the bllurred png



and this came 2 hours later

i know it's kinda floatin head :s, but i forgot about that, and the shoulders didn't fit anyways ^^

EDIT: I removed text


did i get better?

previous attempts









greez dray

 

The 'Stay cool even under water' sig looks good imo, i would maybe take some of the effects off his face, but, overall i really like it...

 

Nice

 

thanks ....

more cnc appreaciated

 

stop centering ur focal and making floating heads. thats ur main problem right now.

 

huh, kk could you give me an example, what else i should my focal of, would be cool

thanks for the cnc, more appreaciated

 

place photos to the right or left or try some nice compositions

 

doesnt feel like your renders work with the type of effects your going with

 

im feelin the same, the first tag you have there was alright, a little small, but the blur over the pdf didn't help it.

the second tag is pretty good, nice effect and good color scheme.

from the past im liking the improvement, keep up the work it'll keep showin even more

 

I don't like the blur on the first one and the border of the first one isnt good. I also dont like the smudge on your focal for that one. The 2nd one is good nice job.

 

kk thanks, yeah tbh i'm not likin the effects on the first too, nor that there is smudge, it's just, well not a cool tag

the second one is the one im most confident with

 

That's pretty damn good IMO.

Reminds me of a toned down Virtuoso sig..

 

actually i was told it was rwally bad

 

V1 of the first one, V2 of the second. Try adding a bit more depth, and try playing around a bit more with lighting sources.

 

kk thank you