It appears to me that the render is abit squeezed. Aside from that It's pretty well done I'd say. Well atleast I like it if nothing more
A little unbalanced and squeezed but it takes a while to get used to verticals. I think you did a great job and should keep going with this concept. Very good potential here. I love vertical tags and what they can represent. Great job for your first attempt, keep it up! ( LOL and if you can't, get some Viagra; hehe )
Well said. As said, the render seems a bit squeezed. I'm not too fond of the text you chose, just the font of it, I think it could look better . Also not a huge fan of the scan lines, kind of messing with the flow to me . Overall great first attempt, keep working at it. Very nice blending by the way .