ehhh bad text,flow,and almost no composition . All I can tell you is to look up some tuts and learn new techniques,and the basics of a tag.
+1 you need to check out tutorials to get the basics laid down before you start making your own style, theres no compo, depth, flow or anyhting in this tag, its a basic bg with 2 renders slapped on, text is awful and having 3 focals the way you do means we are looking around rather than being drawn to the focal
Go to the tutorial forum here on GR, some great stuff in there. Just look around, look for stuff you think looks interesting.
keep reading tuts. and keep making sigs to get better... When you do find your style stick with it till you get crazy good. but back to the tags- Find better quality renders blend blend blend Find a more efficient way to add text into your tag - look at some text tuts as also.... theres some cool stuff out there how to blend your text with the rest your tag try lots of different styles -Like useing C4d's/Pen tools/Smudging/etc *hopefully some of this advice helps a little* but for getting Photoshop yesterday its alright Keep it up