I'm liking the second version, mostly because in the first version you blurred the background and it just seems as if you splatted on the stock and the butter flies. It could be a tad bit better if you don't blur the background and add a little bit of light to the main stock. It has random colouring but it is catchy. Especially the Butter / Clutter flies Keep it up. Z.
not really feeling the flow and depth of this tag, but it has nice colours and is actually quite nice Kiu.
The colored version is better, but I feel there is something wrong with your render. Maybe try blending it more?