the render is very dynamic however, the overal sig feels really boring to me. the text and colours could definately be mmore lively imo
Great use of the render.. good blending too but work on the background (although I do like the c4d you used)
u got a very strong render what you need to do is make the background even stronger for it to fit man
Its look pretty good. My suggestions are to make the colors stronger, ditch the text, and add some more powerful fx. It would look alot better IMO, but as it is it's not bad.