Get rid of the typo,and try not to make the text so long. Only use text if there's too much negative space or if it can flow in nicely The smudging is a bit bland on the left,and the c4d on the right could be blended in more better. Like the effect on the left of her arm though.
I like the effects' style in this tag and in the hellgate one you made, but text pretty much ruins this one, and i'd also like to see a bit more in the bg. if you fix those things, you should come up with some awsome tags