im not feelin this one. it just looks like a few c4d with a border and random pen lines. pen lines although oretty good, are random. use with the flow of the sig. and take out the scale lines.
also the pen lines aren't going too one single point they are going in all directions... also, I think you should do something about the text right under.
when the redner in this case c4d gives you an established flow run with it. make the pen lines follow the arms of the c4d. scan lines are chaotic. either take them out or only leave them on the right side. you do not have to clarify that it is a abstract so you can remove that. and do more blending with your name text.
