Too grainy.. Doesn't have an established flow, effects and text isn't good either and you misspelled her name as Trya on the tag. I suggest reading tutorials to get a better grasp over whichever program you're using.
Sorry if I came off as harsh. But I improved a lot from getting harsh CnC since it actually tells the person what is wrong with the tag.. lol I'm just rambling.. :wacko: