Best tag you've made till know. Just remove the white dots, not to fond about them. And i agree about the text..
Although I'm not a fan of sprites I really don't mind yours. Personaly I would just drop the text all together.
on a fine day i would rate that textless verion 8.5/10 juz some minor darkening and its a fine tag imo..
Textless looks very nice, maybe both versions are a tad bit oversharpened. Try doing a clipping mask on the text.