I don't like the text.. I think it's too big for this sig.. and imo the colors don't fit.. it's like b&w and color.. ? you're a really good sigmaker but I just don't like this one. sorry =/
Text should have a lower opacity. Sticks out too much. And you should desaturate the render/focal a bit, maybe add a black and white gradient map to it @ 70-80% opacity. Other than that it looks great.