Shadow

first in a while, messed around with distort

 

Try and fix that blurry light in the bottom right. Text seems okay. Effects are pretty nice, and depth is okay too, try to add some more though.

 

Love the left side. Good job.

 

thanks. i suppose i tried to make the right a sort of lighting thing. didnt really work as i wanted it to

 

omg your current is great

 

Your current is way better.

The lighting seems a bit forced and the text is not really at the right place, it distracts from the focal point.
Work a bit on your lighting, improve it with C4Ds or omni / spotlights.
Anyways the render seems a bit LQ.