Its nice, but try adding some bleu highlights here and there. And for the text, just try anything. I use to suck at it too. Now im starting to get the hang of it.
This would defiantly benefit from some color. And you can't avoid text forever, so I think you should give it a go, and even if whats there isn't that great, people will help you if you post it. Just try not to overuse Arial, Times New Roman and Helvevitca (sp?). One more thing, the stock looks very pale, and really doesn't make it more appealing.
The flow is nice, the right prat of it seems a bit empty and the render at all is a bit too bright. Colors would be pretty nice on that one. Lower down the brightness of the render and may add some more contrast.
Tried to use all your advices when done the v2... Lowered the brightness and added more contrast, colored it a bit, put a text (which is plain crap IMO), lowered the lightning on the shoulder and added another source of light.. Still needs improvement, but I think it's a bit better
