I actually made this one a week or two ago, ive just been extremely busy. (no colored, im really bad at getting the desired colors so:/) c&c is greatly appreciated
Good flow. Work on the focal point, I guess it is not really there. Lay some effects over the focal so it is clear where it is. Since it is a b/w sig it is even more important. I know that the focal is there, but I think you should improve it so that the sig at whole gets better.