Not sure about the pink light, rest is fairly nice though I cant put my finger on why I dont like it more.
focal is way too big for the tag. effects are messy. there's no coordination to it. that blob of c4d at his temple is killing the tag. as is the pink light in the corner. truth is harsh. sorry.
Looking good. The pink lighting is a bit strong and shouldn't be there in the first place. (Unless you brush some pink on his face). The effects to his left should be blurred to create better focus and depth. Lighting on the left is weird. And yeah, what C4Ds are you using?