Text ruins it man, take that off. After that I would say work on comp and flow because it looks a bit thrown together, still looks good though.
Font =P -Its ok, I suck at font too. The tag is nice, a little light on the left side for my liking, but its still nice. The left side i think should be the same color as the left, it would look better, and then add some more effects in. It looks like 65% of the way done so far, but keep at it, I see a lot of potential in this one.
Needs a focal point. Text is sort of big and not very good. If anything the 3rd one is the best, imo.