Focal needs a lot of work. First thing I was drawn to were the effects on <-- that side, but the render is way overblurred on --> this side. I would try sharpening him or something to help out the focal point. Other than that, depth is ok, not amazing, but it's aight. I like the effects. The lighting is off however. It's coming from above/right of the render, but you have it just way left/above and it's super bright/over-concentrated. I hope that helps you out a little bit.
