Heh. *Blushes* I figured I should post the bad with the good. Here, my mateys, is a tag with potential that I murdered. Feel free to get your stabs in on me now. :mellow: <_<
I see loads of potential here! As the above said, I suggest you remove the text and add some more, maybe smudging or more C4D's Keep working on this one man!
I can tell when I can't get a render to "work" because I start trying to do way too much to it. Just take a break from it and come back to it in a day or so and start over. Maybe you'll find some inspiration between then and now. Props for posting it even though you thought it was bad. Shows you want c&c.