To me it doesn't really flow well at all, and the text is impossible to read lol. Also, text over the border = no bueno bro. Idk, just not feelin this one.
There is something about the render having none of the colours on it that are in the BG its a cool idea but i think it would look better with a Gaming render or comic render something along those lines in it
Hmmm.... You've gotten a shotgun response. Everybody likes/dislikes something different. I don't like the text over the border. Try to use a simpler font. Make it a tad bigger as well. I think the flow is fine. Maybe a little light source below her face would top it off though. I would try to blend her shoulder into the C4ds. ^_^ I think that would just be pounding. Pretty good for the most part. Could use a tiny bit of work though.