It's not terrible, But the bg isn't very appealing. :| Also, the whole thing looks a little blurry. Text is nice. Check out some of the tuts here on Gamerenders and I think you'll learn a lot.
work on composition, depth, flow colour, text and your effect work... so, essentially everything... Lucky for you, this site has an awesome tutorial section. I'd recommend you give some a try
Good luck mate! You'll learn a lot in the tut section, the guys here make everything simple. I use Gimp and I can transpose the tuts here they're so good.
There is too much effects, it is really busy. It is also quite monotone. The main part, is that your focal is really weak. Some of the effects, are nice though.
Yup what they said... Just keep reading tuts and use ur own improvision, doin the tut directly wont let u learn how to do things on ur own... *just a thought* Keep trying