Colored version is really nice, but it's just really hard to see and tell what it is. I had to look at it for about 15 seconds before seeing what the image was. :\
If the C4D (?) around the mask was toned down a bit, I think it would have been easier to see the focal more clearly but v1 looks great bro.
Ya colored is better, just remove the c4d or whatever it is from the left, it bothers me :S Rest is pwnsome lol
Pretty good overall, though it took me a while to realize what the render was. Maybe lower the opac/erase the cd4 to the left (our left) of the render.