5- I dont really see a flow or any focal point, it seems like you put c4ds and some gradient maps 6- a little better but not liking the lighting and on the right is too empty..
Cool pentool but that's it imo 3/10 Bit too messy 2.75 Blur the backround (gaussian blur 0.6-1.0px) and add something ontop of the blur (behing the render tho) and it would look awesome 5.25
Im not liking this at all sorry the render has bad quality and some parts look over sharpened. It needs more effects. 6