Allright, i wrote this poem for English because i have to do it for a Project. I Need to know if u guys think this is good...Please RnC and know that this would really help me lots :lol: Ok here goes... Head Splitting, Eyes Burning. Need Something Quick, Non-Drowsy. Smooth Pills Coated Slick. "Rx," Reads the Label. Take One and Wait.. Alas, the Pain Stays Great Take One for the Pain, One for the Road. Two for the Boss Who Gnawes on Your Bones. Chest Clenches, Face Breaks. Here Lies: James the Great.. Who's Life was Taken by Artificial Hate Yes this poem is about Overdosing on Perscription Pills, its the topic im doing for English Project
Depressing and creepy. Nice! I think you should work on the structure and rhythm of it. The theme is nice, but it has no flow at all. Put some rhyme scheme in to give it more flow. If you want to keep it free verse, try to make a rhythm, using syllables or varied emphasis. English AP hell yeah!
thanx Bona! I work on it some more. The FInal is due tommorow :unsure: I just finished printing out my 11 page Booklet, lol hell of alot of work The funny thing is i did this in 3 days. I had 9 WEEKS TO DO THIS But CWD= Procrastinator so i did all on the last minute :lol:
thanx Bona! I work on it some more. The FInal is due tommorow :unsure: I just finished printing out my 11 page Booklet, lol hell of alot of work The funny thing is i did this in 3 days. I had 9 WEEKS TO DO THIS But CWD= Procrastinator so i did all on the last minute :lol: [/b][/quote] WHo isnt a procrastinator. Bout the poem, I agree with bona, needs more depth.
WHo isnt a procrastinator. Bout the poem, I agree with bona, needs more depth. [/b][/quote] Procrastination is a way of life. Embrace it. :lol: I just hope CWD understood what I said. Too many literary terms in there. :unsure:
Smarty pants. Man i'm parched, tata. Lol, dang now I must go to the facility. Hehe, big words are cool!
