your render looks weird and its kinda hard to get a good textured darker look when youve got perfectly straight rectangles 4/10
6/10 for first. too contrasted, no flow, bad typo. second is a lot better. taht being said, still no flow (bg pushes against the cutout), but i like it. type is bad tho. 7/10 6.5/10 for second. good flow, but typo doesn't fit. don't always use smooth sans serif fonts. try something new man.