I think you need to work on typo a bit more, I don't really like it in this piece all that much. Overall it is good though.
It looks a little flat to me, just not enough depth. Other than that small concern, I like the effects you used.
lol [ i m g ] http://img228.imageshack.us/img228/631/kovanfankp1ae5.gif [ / i m g ] ^ no spaces in between thanks for the comments everyone